This script strikes a masterful balance between style and substance, putting a unique spin on the familiar detective vs. criminal storyline and adding in a dash of something new. Its imagery and scene descriptions are both engaging and effective. In Jason’s hospital room, for example, they paint a clear picture of setting and tone. This script’s dialogue yields a similar effect through different means. In the motel lobby scene, DW’s concern over the girl in the passenger seat is palpable without ever being expressed verbally. Every line that did make it in serves a purpose, as is especially apparent in the scene between Seymour and Rufus. They’re chaotic in the best way possible, their dialogue and dynamic establishing them as distinct and well-crafted characters.
This script’s practical strengths and well-crafted story were outstanding, resulting in a fast-paced script without a dull moment in sight. It was suspenseful, yet methodical, laying the framework for a thrilling mystery akin to the BBC’s Killing Eve.
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First of all, I write in coffee shops most of the time. That's right, I'm that guy, but listen, there are too many fucking distractions at home. I have two amazing dogs - Nickels and Thor, that decide when the computer is in my lap, it's time for me to pay extra attention to them. And then there's the TV, video games, books, etc. All these things play into my avoidance of writing and therefore amp up the degree of self-loathing I feel at not writing on any given day. And writing is such a solitary game that it's nice to at least be around other humans while I'm tooling around inside my brain.
I spent a good part of my youth moving around the country. I’ve lived in Maryland, Florida, Texas, back to Maryland, Northern California, Illinois, and Finally Southern California (Los Angeles), where I’ve been for thirty-one years.
I grew up wanting to be a comic book artist/storyteller, or rock star (drummer). In my twenties, I dropped out of art school to pursue fame and fortune and convinced my bandmates to pack up their lives in Chicago and move with me to Los Angeles. I loved being on stage and performing. I loved the attention, but not the spotlight... I should probably seek professional help for that.
We came close, but in the end, it didn’t work out. The band broke up, and I was tired of being a poor musician - it’s no joke, I lived on Ramen and Mac and Cheese. Through a friend, I got a job in the film industry, and I’ve been there ever since.
I never gave up on my artistic endeavors. Even after moving to LA, I still took art, animation, and photography classes. I wrote hundreds of songs while in my band (that I never showed anyone), and continued to write and draw my own comic book stories.
It was on the set of Deadwood that I was inspired to write screenplays. Day after day of watching David Milch work, his process, his grasp of character, story, and his interaction with the actors, really opened my eyes to a new world of storytelling. I began taking classes in screenwriting and story structure, trying to absorb everything I could about the craft.
Early on in my writing career, I optioned a screenplay that I wrote with a good friend (JP). The Inked short has placed in the final round of several short screenplay competitions and Inked In Blood the feature has won several contests, including the Table Read My Screenplay - Park City, the WildSound contest, the 2017 Depth of Field contest, and the Festival of Horror. In 2018 Inked was a finalist in the Inroads Screenwriting Fellowship and this year it is a Finalist in the 2019 Underground Indie Film Fest, and the Table Read - Hollywood competition.
My screenplay “A Life Unravelled,” is a Finalist in the 5th Annual WideScreen Film Festival.
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